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I've listed this article for peer review because, I want to get the article to GA status. I had two editors review the page and one of them told me to request a PR.

Thanks, DivaKnockouts (talk) 16:43, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "alongside the help of various" just "with the help of..."
  • "Hiram Cruz, Francisco Saldaña" don't have articles, are they notable enough to be included in this list?
  • " Francisco Saldaña, Marcos Masis" -> " Francisco Saldaña and Marcos Masis".
  • Try to avoid repetition like "The album was.... The album was...".
  • Avoid over linking (ie. don't link De La Ghetto twice in two paragraphs for example).
  • Is there not a link for Latin Grammy Awards you can use in the lead?
  • "a reggaetón version " again, you've already linked reggaeton, but oddly without a diacritic the first time, and with a diacritic the second time.
  • " never charted on " -> "failed to chart on".
  • "2008-2010" in the infobox, needs an en-dash, not a hyphen per WP:DASH.
  • " its 5th year" fifth.
  • "Unlike, Drama Queen or" no need for comma.
  • "Drama Queen is the first album where Ivy wasn't in a " consistency in italics, and avoid contractions (i.e. "was not" rather than "wasn't").
  • "Ivy had this to say:[3]" just "Ivy said:[3]"
  • " A studio owned by reggaeton production moguls Luny Tunes." this sentence should be merged with the former somehow because on its own it isn't a complete sentence.
  • In fact "A studio owned by reggaeton production moguls Luny Tunes. The album was produced by reggaeton production duo Luny Tunes..." is repetitive and doesn't make much sense to me.
  • The "English" in the translated names shouldn't be in italics.
  • Check all instances of the album name are in italics.
  • "Music and themes" is unreferenced.
  • Don't overlink "English" six or seven times in the next section. And again, not in italics.
  • In the personnel section "Jose Cotto - Mixer" replace all these spaced hyphens with en-dashes (per WP:DASH).
  • Ref titles also need to use en-dashes instead of spaced hyphens where applicable.

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:37, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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